- Snarky, Clever, or Stating-the-Obvious internal narrative, especially when it's done for the sake of establishing voice.
- Internal narrative that repeats information rather than adds new information.
- Crappy-written action and dialogue that relies on internal narrative for support.
- Lengthy setting descriptions.
- First person with a ton of internal narrative. (I often avoid FP POV)
- Tough chicks with something to prove.
- Every chapter ending on a life-threatening hook.
- When authors try too hard to "say something."
- In general, romance as a main plot-line. (that one really is just me)
Sensing a theme there with the internal narrative? Not a big fan of a ton of internal narrative. Much of it is quite useless in books, even published books. I DO NOT mind narrative that tells, though. Sometimes that's the most efficient way to get info across and get us back to the story.
What do you hate?