I'm back onto Hinterland, fixing the opening and looking at Conduit's critiques, which have been languishing on my hard drive for months now. It's the rare critter that can make you laugh even as he delivers the bad news. For instance:
Are we going down the man-love route here?
...'pants' threw me. As you probably know, pants are underwear here, and you wear trousers over the top - I had a sudden image of Sean standing in Y-fronts!
Oh, and, his bloke alerts. This is when Sean sounds like a girl. I wonder how that slips in, really, cuz in RL, I rarely sound like a girl.
Okay, that's the truth split in action. You decide which side of the Divide it rests on.